"You walked the other way
In a desperate time of need
True colours went on display
Agenda based on pure greed"

i can definitely relate to that... beautiful and heartfelt poem.

Finally my sweet Laura some new stuff from you!!!

I can always relate to your friendship poems in one way or another which is why I missed reading them for the most part. Your words and rhymes are something that aren't in every poem I read which is great! Love it Laur!
Chels

Wonderful piece. If you can't get the message from this poem then you're probably illiterate. You touched my heart with this one girl.

Jason

You've come a long way with your writing my sweet, wonderful, simply wonderful. A powerful piece!

Great poem

Good poem, sorry for the misfortune

Hi dear Laura....

here's your critique....its\'s as much as i can find....im digging deep, yet! ha ha

"in a desperate time of need"
ok, i think that this mustve happened once, where you needed your friend and he/she wasnt there.... because it would put more emphasis on that particular event when you needed her...the time of need would be highlighted..

also in the first stanza third line...
i think you should add an "i"... i appreciate and understand that it'll hurt the flow....but i think its confusing for the reader to know if its you or her who doesnt feel that feeling...

Great write otherwise....the third stanza was my absolute favorite :D

Take care Lawia!
Dhaval

so i think replacing the 'a' with 'the' would be better, because

Oh no...the last line needs to be the second one in the third paragraph.. ha ha ...sorry!!