I know this is an older poem from the date and I have yet to read enough of your poems to remember exactly if you have improved but the flow made this one a bit hard to read, unless that was just me. Other than that...good poem, and as a side note...Damn writers block!

Argh..... my god i need to comment these... theyre so beautifuly written.... i cnt help myself.... you certainly hav a unique writting capability!! its amazing.... you've definatly kept me interested.... keeping you in my favourites