Comments : She and I

  • 17 years ago

    by SEAN

    Cleverly written

  • 17 years ago

    by Startle Me

    Wow.
    This is an amazing poem.
    Only one advice,
    Try to make it have
    The same syllabulls
    For example

    She's so random
    I tend to be quiet
    She could make me smile
    When I was so mad I could cause I riot

    You can make the bottom smaller
    And turn it into
    When mad, could cause a riot.
    Or something like that.
    Sorry.
    I know I have different
    Poetry style than yours.
    So try to make it as you as possible.