Good one silver it's silver
and need some motion(pictures) and it will be gold good job dear

Hey Silver J, first of lal i just wanted to thank you for your comment. I love your comments and your poems so you know.. i like the fact you reply to my thread asking for honest feedback. Anyways that said i thought this poem had a good flow, and good vocabulary usage. I liked your description - it created a clear image inside the readers head. Good usage on enjambment, it made the pace speed up. Overall a great poem! Keep writng! xx

This poem was great love. your choice of words was amazing. 5/5.

Good poem overall, it's nice.:>