I really enjoyed this poem. It was unique and crafty yet not so different as to throw off the reader's ability to read it. Try not to force the rhyming on certain lines. Sometimes it doesn't work and only restricts what you can say. Try to let the words flow and slowly refine them down into stanzas that rhyme if you wish. All-in-all i thought this was a good poem.

Hey i was wondering if you could comment my new poem called "missing you"..thanks..and i definitly agreee with the person above...5/5 from me

Hey i like you poem because it gets in depth about how you feel and i admire that. Keep up the good work and this poem was excellent!

I LiKE THiS POEM ALOT.SO TRUE

Nice poem!! keep writting!
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5/5

I like it. Good job

I really like this it makes so much sense it is so much the truth..Amazing Job..