Woah I loved the words just for starters...
Like they were all so strong and powerful
The only thing is I just wished it would have rhymed
But it is one of those poems that the flow was so good it did not need it
At first I did not know it was a Holocaust poem but then I got to thinking and when you wrote it down there it was a big help
But it would have been a great poem even if you decided to take it out I dont know lol I am just rambling right now well here are things I liked:
1. The first stanza, the imagery was so vivid and emotional I could feel myself feeling the same you know like my shoulder was bleeding and my temples pounding I loved it!
2. The fifth stanza- It was heart fallen and sad because oh no! She is down is she okay type of thing immeditaly rushed in over my head
3. The eigth stanza- I loved the imagery once again I could feel thier pain
4. The ninth stanza- It is suspenceful like oh my gosh the gun fired who is dead or who is shooting type of thing you used excellent imagery
5. The last two paragraphs were good it felt like it should have ended there
Some things to improve on:
Maybe some rhyming
Not so many discriptive words it is a little to much
I loved the poem overall it was good
(p.s.) it is a little under 300 words

Wow. That's good. I don't know how it is but it is...

Great One! I enjoyed this poem...

Hey dear, another great poem by you, you are really great and im glad i have already gave you a space in my favorite list as you are truly my favorite. keep up the great work.

Wow thats really good, well done xxxxx

I like this one. And since you said to do it, I will. The link to mine is: http://www.best-love-poems.com/poems.php?id=860673

For a Holocaust poem, this wasn't very well written at all. This had no emotion in it for such a horrible fate some endurded.
For a regular poem, it was rather interesting.
But, again, for a Holocaust poem I didn't feel what I should have felt... Sorry.

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