Keep that voice a singing girl. Nice piece with a stroke of resiliance at the end.

I really liked it. I love the imagery, and I feel like it tells a story through the parallel of a constellation and relationship 9perhaps? that's what I got). You did a lovely job of recreating the picture through poetic structure and sound. One thing though, was "Fear will not fill my mine"
meant to be "mind"? that's what I got out of it but I could be wrong. Anyway,
my favorite lines were,
"Missed your target
Maybe struck it true
Pierced by deceit
My voice was silenced"

Wonderful job

Superb!! It was a wonderful write...created very realistic imagery and the style was astounding!

the last stanze (which by the way ended the poem off very strong)
I will not retreat
Staring into your eyes
Fear will not fill my mine
New voice have I found
...could you have possibly meant 'mind' instead of 'mine'?