First stanza, I believe you meant "she," instead of "her." Second stanza is very strong and emotion-packed, third stanza falls slightly, but manages to keep the quality level up. Fourth stanza is overly simple. Fifth stanza is weak, somewhat un-needed. Sixth stanza, you should say "got sick again." Otherwise, the storyline becomes a bit confused. Last stanza is contradictory. Her heart is a part of her phsyical body, they are not seperated.

Overall, a nice write, with some faults.

Touching.

This is a very well written piece dear. Its really catching the heart and affecting my feelings. I read it with full concentration and I found it so lovely.

Dear in this line
"That her might never heal?" I think "her" should be " she". But its not totally wrong as far as descriptive grammar is concerned.

Anyways the poem is for sure worth 5/5 and you got it. Can you rrc my latest Acrostic.

Tc