This could be a really good song. I really enjoyed the lines even though they were a bit different then I'm used to. Great job all in all and I must read some of your other work.

Im not really used to that form and pattern, but I still thought it was really good. Ill have to read some more of your poems.

This is really good nice job!!!

EXCELLENT poem. I love the way you've written it.

Fantastic

Josie

Awww this poem was so sweet very movin good job! 5/5