I love chocolate... But I love you more

awwwwwwwwwwwww.. thts gd.... and very innocent feelings your wrk is nice. i loved this poem take care

I love chocolate... But I love you more.
That's a lot, before you two were war.
I couldn't choose which one I love best.
Now I love you and...you know the rest.

That stanza made me laugh because I too am a lover of chocolate and he knows that's my weakness.

Nice job on this poem.

Awww...
this is so sweet...
it made me happy,
which is hard to do right now

Awww.
i love how it's so simple, and it's so adorable. i love the part about chcolate. lmaooo!
:D well i hope everything goes well for you two.
lotsa love.

Its a cute poem. a few suggestions i have would be to edit the words because some of the parts its hard to understand what you are trying to say. and also making it flow a little more, the rhymes sound a little forced. but its a cute poem

Sweetness.....lol just kidding.
Such a sweet poem, I smiled from start to finish. Flowed well and i loved the way you could tell it came straight from the heart, almost as though you were reading it straight to me...if that makes any sense? lol well i know what i mean anyway i hope you do too haha.
Great poem!! 5/5

Awww this is adorable I love it!!! It's very well written nice job

You say it is a corny poem and in fact it is but the reason it is not terrible is because though it lacked depth, it was obvious it was written with strong feelings.

Pro: Romantic title. Con: The rhyming of weak and week.

Pro: Funny moment of chocolate and Jon being at war in your mind. Con: Not enough supporting/imagery details.

Pro: Simple structure. Con: Simple rhyming.

Pro: Underlining humor. on: DOes not see as though you reached your full potential.

Although I felt the rhyme scheme was a little off occasionally and at times the phrases were slightly juvenile, the writing was clear and concise and the message was very sweet. Great job and keep writing! :)

Being so near you, I just feel so strong.
Not being near you, it just feels so wrong.
^ I don't htink you should use "near you" twice, it makes the words lose effect a bit.

THis was a very sweet poem and you put nice emotion into it. I felt that the language and sentence structures you used though, were not as well done as they could have been. I felt that some of the lines did not flow very well. Also, I think in some places you only wrote something because it rhymed, not becuase it actually worked into the poem. BUt overall, very nicely done hun. 4/5

I agree with the person above, dont use "near you" twice, you could probably put like Being so near you, I just feel so strong, If I'm not, It just feels wrong, I dont know thats the first thing that popped into my head but yea overall it was a pretty cute poem great emotion, well written.

Cute & Adorable.
Your word usage was amazing & left vivid descriptions in my mind. The flow was flawless & can't get any better.

"I love chocolate... But I love you more.
That's a lot, before you two were war.
I couldn't choose which one I love best.
Now I love you and...you know the rest."

^ My favorite stanza. "I love chocolate... But I love you more" - that is such a true statement for me. Lol. Wonderful job, keep it up! 5/5

Stephanie Lynn .+.

You can cvhange your poem either way.. it sounds really good I love it and the rhymes too.. Good job again! well done 5/5

Awww this is soo cute, i love this poem & good luck with your boyfriend hunny

love brittany (MD)

Haha. Wow, aww! That was so adorable! What a lovely dedication to your man!

The cooties part made me laugh!

I love chocolate... But I love you more.
^ Haha. That's just priceless!

Now I love you and...you know the rest.
^ I loved that line. You let the reader basically interpret their own meaning. And conclusion.

Wonderful write!

Soo cute :)