This is a great poem!

Here are a few things that might make it even better though:

In the third stanza the first line might read better if it said "I know a ver hard task."

Third stanza, last line, I think its supposed to say "your" rather than "you"

Fifth stanza, second line: Maybe if it said "You're" rather than "you are" it might flow better.

I really like the last two lines of the sixth stanza:
"I just want to scream and cry
and grow wings so i can fly"

In the second to last stanza, the second to last line is a bit too long. Maybe if you re-worded it....it might flow better.

I like the last stanza a lot.

Over all: GREAT JOB!! keep it up! I cant wait to read the other ones!

This is my favrite :} great job

Nice job!

Is your name vanessa or janessa. i was jw cause my nick name is nessa...ya but i like this poem! keep it up

Extremely fasinating...How ever..I do not wish to shave my hair, I wish to come in the door to be out of the cold frigid world!
~BECCA~

This is really good, it made me think of someone i know that feels like that, great poem!