Yo thas a very deep poem......keep up the good work and looking forward to see more nice poems from you.

Yeah, the poem was great. Stanzas would be a little nicer.. Just to keep it looking neat, and not like a story. Honestly, it is only my opinion, when I see a poem that is not in any sort of stanzas, I always think "I'm going to be here for a while" because it seems longer. Not really trying to critisize you. You're a great writer, keep up the good work. You do have potential. =)
-Ally