Such a long poem but i loved it! had so much packed in it. well done!

you will be added into my favourites if you have another great poem like this!

5/5 David

Ok! WOW. This is absolutley amazing.. Such a sad, heartbreaking story. But it was written so very beautifully. I honestly.. just, loved this. It brought tears to my eyes..

A few things though :

My eyes wants to cry [I think you should take the 's' off of 'wants'].

"Yes I'm aware he says."

^ for this line.. I'm guessing that what you mean is that 'your dad' said.. ''Yes I'm aware''. So therefore, it should be written: "Yes I'm aware," he says. [that is if I'm right, I could be wrong :) ]

But. anyways! This was just amazinggggg, dear.

Bri [x]