Wow, this is amazing, 5/5 i don't really know what to say, cause i think it is perfect, beautiful, and it really makes you think, 5/5 again

I pass the ball to your court,
your time to change.
Your turn to make the difference

you ended it perfectly,
gabriella

I love it. It is deep, very deep. P.S. Please read the rules for the THIS IS MY FIRST CONTEST!!! contest. The rules have been changed. You are still a judge. But the rules have changed. Thankyou!

Very deep. awesome ending.

I actually full on love this poem. it's so much better than the other two you've written. it's raw. it's conceptual. it's thought-provoking. it's amazingly well written.
i love these lines beyond belief:
"Fists never fly
but sometimes I wish they would.
That would mean change."
this is much more sophisticated writing and i really enjoyed it. i hope there's more like this.x

Intresting read... if im completely truthful it didnt really grab my attention. One thing i did like about was the emotion. You could feel your anger towards her. You could almost in your minds eye see someone screaming all of this out at her. The emotion was clear and it was quite powerful. But i htought the structure wasnt all great. Next time try writing in stanza's. This may help the overall presintation of the poem. Maybe even make your line's similar/same length? Your use of "change", well i felt you used it to much in one stage of the poem and the rest of the poem did not use it as much. But like i said, your emotion in the poem was excellent. - Keep that emotion in all your work. Keep writing! xx

I understand this feeling in this poem i really like it 5/5 =]]

Wonderful write with so much emotion within. The flow was good, however; I felt the structure needed work, perhaps breaking it into stanzas would help.

Peace, Joe

Moving... Reminds me of my mum and grandmothers relationship... but thats a story for another day. You really got talent like i said befor!
Good going 15/10