Wow, that was superb. Yes, it sounds like it would be difficult to master but you did it fantastically.
Excellent! 5/5

Gem
You do all types of poetry so well.
This was really a joy to read. Excellent job!

Two leaves are dancing in the sparkling twilight
Twirling beneath, under the beautiful trees
Two nightingales cooing about singing a song
As nature looks on in the moonlight with delight
Walking gracefully together watching the dance
Two lovers are kissing under pale scattered stars

Loved it.
Take care Cindy

Wow thats a masterpiece .Amazing the way you managed the rules and beauty together ,you very very talented gem.

This indeed seems a very tough pattern but the way u did it...it seems so easy. No matter how easy it is...i know i cant even try.. :o)

very nicely written dear...very smooth

all the best and take care

This is a difficult form and you have made it look so easy. Such a beautiful form......you make me want to write one. Excellent job!!!!!

It's a sweet poem, but honestly, I grew impatient with the double lines...I think refrain is a powerful tool, but used too much and it removes the effect it can have and becomes a chore for the reader.
It's a brilliant idea though, and reading through certainly pays off at the last stanza...which is quite a cute stanza, actually...
Overall, a bittersweet poem for me...