Thought it was really good. However i thought the strict rhyming and syllable allignement did hinder some of the emotion in the poem. That said, it was still really good, Can totally empathise with what your feeling.
keep it up
5/5
-Black night

Cheers for the comments uve put up btw, really apreciate it. Thought this one was great, cant remember if i commented on it or not.
cant wait for the rest to arrive, wana see that red number. ;)
hope to hear from you soon.
Take care
-Black night-