Wow thats good, i like how you have layed it out and the wording you have used, well done xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Yup. i really like this one. this is totally like my writing style. has a powerful message and a lot of content in and between the lines. excellent job here!!

I liked the format...and I didn't.
The pace was quick and desperate therefore in tone with the poem subject. However, the occasional rhyme seemed sudden and clumsy, maybe no rhyme would have been more effective.
I liked your diction....again it worked with the message you were trying to portray.
Your work proceeds your years. I didn't even start writing till I was 15, let alone be quite mastered at it. Keep writing, you've got talent.
Oh and I hope you had a nice birthday lol I read it was the beginning of this month.

Incredible poem once more and a flawless flow. I loved this. Great job! Nice work!

5/5
~Stephen White