You're tugging on the strings of my heart.
And I've been watching myself fall apart.
I'd gladly give it up for you, everything
But in the process, I'm unraveling.

I liked this stanza.
Nice poem.

That m'dear, was bloody excellent!
It could have been a song and it would still have been amazing

"Dreams have stopped coming to me at night.
Instead lack of sleep says that I'm not all right."

The only thing i'd do is take out the 'that' in the second line. It kinda throws it a bit, but it's amazing the way it is as well.
This is my new fave from you, lol
5/5
*Gem*

"Dreams have stopped coming to me at night.
Instead lack of sleep says that I'm not all right.
Tomorrow is haunting me because I'm alone.
No where feels right. There's no place to call home."

I soo can relate to this stanza, a beautifull piece of art :)) absolutly love it 5/5

This is a really good poem! I love it. 5/5. My favorite part is probably the last two lines, but all of them are great. :)

This is good. I assume it is a song and that the stanza they are referring to is really the chorus since it is repeated.....At any rate, you did a good job!

Oh wow..
I frikken LOVE this!
Each line was better than the last, the flow was flawless, and that ending has so much impact.
The imagery you used created vivid pictures.
You did a great job with this!