Super long and super awesome. i love long poems b/c the ending is always great. anyways nice job. shanik

Your the one that hurts me, = You're the one that hurts me,

Your the reason, = You're the reason,

And its because of you, = And it's because of you,

Your happy now. = You're happy now.

Well written poem. Good job. It was a little sketchy and just barely made a 5 but i will give it to you dear. Just remember that you need to work on your flow even in a free verse.

5/5
~Stephen White

My last gasping breathe,
^ It should be "breath"

This was very emotional and full of feeling. I felt that the "are you happy now?" got a bit repetitive. It works well in some poems, but as this was so long i felt the words lost their meaning a bit. I especially liked the last few stanza's, I felt they had a bit more how do you say "oompth" to them. It was very well done though. Nice job 5/5

At first i was a lil reluctant as to whether i would like it or not...but the ending was kind've ironic and made me absolutely love it! Great work!
Jonda Beth

I think you said Are You Happy Now a little too much. Kind of ruined the flow a little bit. But other then that, it was great! 5/5

THis is good. I like the style, but maybe you could work on making it flow better? So that way it would read easier.
<3

I thought the poem was written very nicely and i loved the words you used. Sometimes even though we're not dead we feel dead, especially when love causes so mcuh pain. great write 5/5

I think this poem is very unique, strong, and perfectly written.

unique, as you took out many of your pain and feelings through out the poem that explain a story, a love story which myself can relate to it in many ways that is why i agree with message you have gave out.

Strong, because your words are making the readers to feel the pain that you have, you are taking us with the poem until the end.

Perfectly written, very nice style and a great choose of words............

one of the great work i read here in P&Q, keep it up. a 5/5 from me as you really deserve it.

Wonderful poem. I like the repition in this poem. The flow was excellent and the emotion was shown.

'Are you happy now?
My last gasping breathe,
Was to tell you,
How much you mean to me.'

My favourite stanza.
Keep it up 5/5

:Sarah:

Like everyone's saying....its long! but it kept me intruiged and interested...
loved the repitition of "Are you happy now?"
maybe there was a bit of repeated ideas...
the ending was strong and well..was perfect for the poem
all in all...very, very good...a definite 5/5...=D

Very long!
But i like it alot. Your a good writer. You did a good job on this poem.
Keep up the good work!!
5/5

~Chelsea

Are you happy now?
You get what you want,
You can be who you are,
Without me.

awwwwwwwww. i realy enjoyed while reading you poem. the structure was good. and it just gives the reader experience. words was simple but thoughtfull. that was easy to understand the feelings and emotions and your messege was clear.
the subject of the poem was good according to its structure.
i loved your poem. and believe me thre are some stanzas in your poem those realy relates to me story. i wish that i copy this poem and email to that girl to who i still love. and say to her that are she happy now? that what she did with me. but i will try to write my own work to how her.

i loved your poem. gr8 work. 5/5
your friend
hassan take care

I love your poems, maybe its because they remind me of myself, almost every single word makes me look inside myself and its me in your words, your poetry reminds me of mine

your an amazing writer

brittany (MD)

Your words werne't that strong and neither was the motion for me. I didn't really feel the pain...

I didnt mid this poem but I think that I liked some of the other poems better. In the beginning the poem started off very strong and the repeating line was beautiful however half way into the line it just got sort of annoying. I really liked however that you decided against making it rhyme, this move made it more poetic and a lot better flow.. overall nice job.

I like the last part the best. The story is amazing and the emtions are strong. Once Again I love this poem, it was one of your better ones 5/5