This is a good poem, just to make it flow a little better you could take some of the I's out! just a little advice to help you out, when you get the time can you look at my poems and make a few comments and give advise if you think needed! thx good poem to

I likeedd ittt:) good poem 5/5

Awesome. 5/5. i loved it. if you've read some of my other poems, u'v seen that i dont really like to rhyme everything all the time. i loved the fact that you didnt make every line rhyme with the next. that way you dont sound like most everyone else and you stand out. great job!