The first and fourth stanzas were my favorite. The first one was powerful and the fourth one because I can relate to it.
The burdens of life...Some fear to live yet also fear death.

''Provoked by piercing glares,
Stray thoughts controlled her mind.
Abandoning the world,
Or was it leaving her behind?''

I LOVE that stanza...it hit me hard and I thought it was very gripping.
The opening of this was beautiful, very powerful and dragged the reader right in, with it getting better from there.

I thought the flow was good for the most part, but at times it did seem a little off.
Apart from that however, I think you did a great job with this.

You like to write a lot of quantity of stanzas on your poems, don't you?
Sometimes, people get overwhelmed.
For example, me.
I'm not really quite enjoying reading that much of your poems because
They're too long.
Maybe you could sum up the main ideas of your story, y'know?
Make it... shorter.
I'm sorry for whining.
It's just how I see it.

Your poem?
It's alright.
5/5

Wow, this is probably my favorite of the ones I've read so far. It's amazingly written, and the flow is flawless. The Emotion - wow. It's just perfection. Like, amazing. No lie.

" And there, from pure imagination,
She saw herself turn clear.
She would never overcome this.
It was by far her greatest fear"

^^ My favorite stanza.

And, you did a wonderful job with the adjectives, they really stuck out, such as; hermit, boney, wreary, and etc.

Very insiteful, I love this stanza :

"Provoked by piercing glares,
Stray thoughts controlled her mind.
Abandoning the world,
Or was it leaving her behind?"

You paint such a clear picture that I can literally see a girl flinching when people talk to her before she sees them, thinking that everyone is looking at her, and thinking about the most random things getting herself all worked up.

Great use of words and analogies, very beautiful, :)

5/5