WHIIIIIIIIIIHIIII! =D This is cute!
5/5 ^^

xxx

I thought is was cute but something about it just didn't seem right. but it was a great piece awesome work

A few mistakes in it. Everything is one word and you used the wrong you're in the line: But you're kingdom's so far away.
That would mean but you are kingdom's so far away. It's not a bad poem but once again I'm usually not that big on love poems. I'll give it a three.

I like this one 5/5

This is a really good poem, but after the ending of the fourth stanza, it sort of lost its flow. Good job though.

.:CiiNDY:.

Awh beautiful. I didnt really see much wrong with this.. I thought that you did a beautiful job expressing yourself.. I kind of wish there was more to this, but thats just me. Otherwise, another well deserved 5/5. Short and sweet.

I am very impressed with this! Your poem is very beautiful and gives you the feeling that you are reading a chapter out of a romance novel. The topic of forbidden love is something that most people don't right about and when they do they usually do not express themselves so well. But you really did an excellent job. The title caught my attention and you portrayed the subject well. Great Job Sweetie, Keep up the good work. 5/5