Comments : Intense Defense

  • 17 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    Wow dude that was sweet, and your poem is quite true with its message 5/5 maybe u can read one of mine.

  • 17 years ago

    by Kurt

    This poem was powerful. The way you described your feelings was fiery and passionate. Each stanza was brilliant and flowed with the rhythm of the lines preceeding it.

  • 17 years ago

    by Simple Sensation

    Hey,
    First of all im sorry for the late feedback, i did 2 of your poems yesteray and ive got another 2 to do now. Just so you know, i didnt spell "realise" wrong, im from England and its now we spell it.
    Anyways, I have to say i really enjoyed reading this poem more then the others ive read previously, this is such a powerful read. The rhyming scheme worked so well in this poem, and none of the rhyme's seemed to be forced at any point. I like your vocabulary usage, it was good. To improve i suggest you use punctuation, it's a tool in poems as the reader can read the poem the way you wrote it to be read. Other then that an excellent read. Keep writing! xx