Very intresting writing. a sad well. because i felt there is deep emotions behind your words. nicely flow of words is used. gr8 work. take care and 5/5

The flow isn't actually that great and the rhymes seem forced. I think the idea is cool but it's just the words that kinda mess it up to me. Strange enough the last line is what's standing out to me. Interesting.
~Faith-less

This is a really nice poem with really nice words...