Comments : Help me (collab)

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    This is a really interesting poem. I'm not too sure what to say about it, but I like it. There is so much raw emotion expressed. Well done. =]

    Tammie

  • 16 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    Collabs are always great. They hold different meanings for everone involved which in turn takes the poem on a different twist with every verse.

    This is interesting. I am sure that your sister will always appreciate the fact that you take the time to write with her.

    --Sher

  • 16 years ago

    by Liz

    The emotions were well put out in this poem. There were some parts that seemed to go off a little but other than that this was a good poem. Keep writing!

    ` Liz =]

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    I liked this David!! You and your sister did a grand job! There were so many excellent words I just loved this poem keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by kiara

    Aww you wrote it with your sister thats so nice :) all my siblings are older than me and are always off at partys now leaving me home lonesome so im sure your sister liked spending time with you

    it was very interesting you can tell that when you write with your sister it gets a different twist to it than your normal work and i luv it all the same lols

    5/5
    <3 kiara

  • 16 years ago

    by Kalee

    This is an interesting poem David. It is good that you can come up with a poem with your sister. It was a good read.5/5

    Kalee

  • 16 years ago

    by debbylyn

    How great to write with your sister. I've done several collabs and always enjoy doing them. Keep writing....good work. Debbie

  • 16 years ago

    by isabel

    Very nice poem, indeed...
    keep on writing...

    *isabel*

  • 16 years ago

    by Wallace

    Interesting poem, Had a nice twist to it. Good job.

  • 16 years ago

    by amanda flood

    Very good i kinda laughed at the end just the way you said it but i loved it well done 5-5