Hey Marc,This one was well written..but something was missing..though..not your best works anyways..
BUT...the second stanza was really powerful...n i loved the choice of words in it!=)
I give a 5/5 for this..Good job!
xxPoojaxx

#4. The missing element of this work would have to be the gurgling emotions you used to bring into play within your other pieces; I didn't feel your sadness and your sickness of love. Oh, well. Anyway. This piece was quite disturbing, really. It's saddening to note how depression shadows a person's mind into thinking that happiness is delusional; such a person should and would find his true happiness, then, in due time.

Best wishes,
Debbie

Very nice poem. I can relate to it.

Eh I found this poem okay, not as good as the other ones i've read but it clearer seems you've gotten better. The emotion wasn't as great as your other poems but this one still has its few edges and it was good. =D

-Bon