Wow that was really good!!... i loved it!!..5/5 from me, great job!!

This is really good. i love the idea and the words you chose to use. something I can really relate to because your sadness/struggle comes through so vividly. very nice job!!

--xoxo nikki.

[ps. you should check out my poems and tell me what you think. thankss so much!]

I think for just beginning it's pretty good maybe instead of jumping right into not rhyming you might want to do near end rhyme or something

I hope someday the smile will come from a happy heart,and it will be real until then keep writing and expressing it. thank you for your nice comment.

Preety good but ya i agree with Kaila

That was a great poem, the perception was awesome, i loved every word of it, my favorite stanza was the very first one, nicely done. 5/5