Oh no. this is so sad. wonderfully described. i liked the other part more. yet this one at the end made me think.

excellent. 5/5 David

WOW this was an amazing piece if a could give a 6/5 just once it would be for this poem.

Nice continuence. You really have a talent and I hope that you will continue to prosper and grow in everything that you write. Nicely done on both parts.

--Sher

WOW, i almost started tocry... that was SO sad!! i loved it, it was an amazing write! you have talent alot of talent. Keep writing and i'll look forward to reading. 5/5 definitaly.
Much love,
TroubleChild

OMG *tear* that was sooo sad. but of course good :) U have real talent.

♥ Nicole

Wow.
thats it.
wow.

Omg so sad.....but very good

This is the first poem I have ever read that made me cry. Both parts are magnificent. You do have a wonderful talent, and I hope that it will take you somewhere. I am amazed, by this. Good job. I love it