Ben
This poem is filled with a dark sadness. Your talent is really great. You have the ability to write about so many things.

Passion Consumes me
Emit fire from my eyes
Gave you my trust
It was returned with lies

Loved this stanza.Keep up the excellent work.
Take Care Love Cindy

This was very good!, This poem kept my interest all the way through!
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Your an excellent writter!
5/5!!

Good rhythm and rhyme. Although not my favorite genre, you did an excellent job!

Could feel your aggression and still you made it rhyme and expressed all your feelings through a poem, now thats an art for sure. Loved all the stanzas as all of them speak for themselves.

Keep writing

all the best and take care

This is the best poem I've read in so long!!
The rage you could feel the power, It deep and you expressed yourself so well through out the whole poem!!
XX Roxy

You write beautifully it pulls me in as if i can feel every emotion you write about. You did a good job 5/5

Dude, really deep poem, i like it alot, its in style of story poem...really good

This is a really good poem. it says a lot and has a good flow to it.

Very good poem, I enojoyed it, keep up the good work.

PS. Plz rate and comment some of my poems.

I really like that it has alot of meaning and seems like you lost someone!

Good work keep it up you're in my favorites

Amazing. Your words leave a haunting picture in my mind; as you write them in a beautifully emotional style.
Each stanza was an excellent flow, excellent job.

Nice poem man. This really speaks. Well done on a great job.
cheers, josh

Wow what a poem excellent brilliant piece of work 5-5

This poem is great!

Excellently written with good rhyme scheme and dark imagery. 5/5 Debbie