1- Capitalize your I's
2- Puncuation
3- Nice poem. Short sweet lines that get to the point. Keep it up missy.

On another note: I'm your new club head. I run fish bowl. And I'd like to say welcome. We have a few rules and I'll dig up the thread that has them in it for you. Our members are friendly so don't be shy, we're like a family here. Ermmm so yeah feel free to ask questions, nominate poems and have fun okay?

xx See you soon!