I like this one. It expresses alot of feeling and a unique writing style. Just one suggestion on line

'lasting than than time itself'

might want to fix that :) otherwise I like it

YOur poem's good, and meaningful. so tha's it. write, you'll improve definitely. Best of luck.

I enjoyed reading the poems, but I shouldnot repeat so much at the beginning of each sentence. I would have left it away. but that is your poet's way of expressing your thoughts.

Judith