This is so touching and meaningful. i love the way you expressed all emotions- sadness, lonliness, faith... you really used words and feelings to great effect. i really great poem! keep it up! xXx
p.s maybe you could read my poem orphan child too. lol. tQ

Very touching poem. Very powerful with the usage of the words. I love the emotions you did well with it.

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"Dried tears on her cheeks can't tell her story untold."

Such a moving line.
You've really showed how much talent you have with this piece.. the rhythm is flawless and the topic is one that is quite a difficult one to portray..
Very well done!
5/5
*Gem*

Amazing poem. Very touching. You did a great job in writing it. Keep up the good work!!

~Chelsea

Mez girl!! i loved it!
keep writting alright=)

"She is corrected by her carer" I wasnt really sure what that was supposed to mean so it kinda threw me off the poem. I really liked the message of this poem it was beautiful the only thing I didnt like to much was the rhyme scheme sometime it rhymed sometimes it didnt some times it rhymed differently, it kind of made it look like you hade 3 different styles in one. And as powerful as the last line was I think that it needs to be a little bit longer in order for it to flow better with the poem as a whole. I really liked the metaphores in this one nice work. just a few things to work on but other than that it was really good.

So sad but so true.
if tony blaire read this he would soon help the poor and needful. :D

xxx alex xxx

There was so much emtion in this poem!! So very sad..
However, the first stanza started out great but toward the end you was off on the flow. The same goes with the second stanza. The message was very clear though. This poem really painted an image in my mind..Great job 5/5
Tyanna