Hun, you need to either capitalize all of the lines, or don't capitalize any..well, you don't HAVE to..but it looks much neater and more oganized if you do. Another thing, some grammar could really bring this piece out..."Falling she caress" Caress to caresses? ...
"and as she flys off she prays
for thier hearts to be healed
and thier wishes to be answered"
Flys to flies. Thier to their, in both lines.
Again, this one has potential as well..it holds a lot of meaning and emotion in it. =)