Comments : Praying for peace

  • 14 years ago

    by tyanna

    This is a wonderfully written poem!! It brought a tear to my eye!!!

  • 14 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    Amazing! You keep suprising me with your work. You rarely rhyme and it's great the way you write! I love your style and your words! Great job!!
    5/5
    heartcha..< 3
    Ciao~

  • 13 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    Hun, you need to either capitalize all of the lines, or don't capitalize any..well, you don't HAVE to..but it looks much neater and more oganized if you do. Another thing, some grammar could really bring this piece out..."Falling she caress" Caress to caresses? ...

    "and as she flys off she prays
    for thier hearts to be healed
    and thier wishes to be answered"

    Flys to flies. Thier to their, in both lines.

    Again, this one has potential as well..it holds a lot of meaning and emotion in it. =)