I have to say that if this turns into a song. It would be a hit. I really loved this, truly. It had great rhythm and flow. Nicely penned.

Take Care,
Bonnie
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This is really nice, I love it. If it does turn into a song, it would be great! Like Bonnie said, great rythm. ^^

Heartz!

This is a reallt nice song. like Bonnie said it would be a hit if it ever comes out. It was beautifully penned. 5/5

Kalee

This was really good, ditto on what Bonnie said. I think you should take out the 'a' in this sentence:

"as the months turn into a years your memory fades"

But other than that, it was great. 5/5