Well, as for the ending, I have a question. Is this based on real life? Because in that case, you may not know the ending toit yet. It's great how it is. I really felt what you were saying with that last set of lines.

"you would wake by me
and say hi
i would just look at you
give you no reply"

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this is your strongest stanza you should write more like it good job otherwise definitly needs a strong ending to tie everything together so that the reader understands what the poem is about

good job

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I love this one soo much
I can relate like most you write
I love it soo much
im here for you