Deceit.

Dark poetry is notmy favorite genre. That being said, I enjoy your poems and the fact that you are willing to share the pain. I empathise with people who suffer from depression and my heart cries for those who self harm. I am glad thatthis poem sharesyour pain in a more conservative way and is not just another cutting poem talking about blood is falling to the floor............I hope that these are not based on your own personal experiences and if they are since you said this was an older poem, I hope that this is only a painful life memory now and not your reality. Thank you for sharing such heartfelt sorrow.

In all honesty, I think you have done better.
There seemed to be a lot of fillers which kind of disrupted the flow.
Apart from that however, it was still pretty good.
I enjoyed the imagery, I thought it was wonderfully used.