Excellent! This is so sad, I love it, Check on some of my poems plzz

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Wallace

The overall image of this poem was great. It was a typical thing that happens these days, which is awesome because than people can relate to it. However, I think the flow could be cleaned up a bit, as well as a stronger ending. The entirety of the poem was very strong, it sent a sad image, and than the ending was sort of dull. Don't get me wrong, it ends it to end it, and doesn't keep the reader in suspense..but you should work on piecing together the strength line by line instead of bunching it in the middle..and then the end should be a BAM type thing when you read it.

I'm sorry if none of that made sense, it's very late lol. But anyways, I did like this poem; but I think it could much better with some fixing up. =)

4.5

Very beautiful and sad... a wonderful poem that really expresses yourself.

Artemis

Wow that was such a sad and powerful poem 5/5