I'm going to be honest, your poem doesn't follow a form. Not all should. The emotion is great. Try following something like abac?lt has the potential to sound great! Hope I didn't offend you. ~Addie~

Oh'ya. 5/5..My favorite line is: drowning in these tears i wont let myself shed...

I can relate to this, and I really like the way you expressed emotions in the poem. 5/5