Comments : Can You See?

  • 17 years ago

    by LithiumSacrifice

    4/5 it was good. it was very to the point and you didnt get off track. the use of words were alrighty but you kept the same thing going..type.. thing.. lol! good job. :)

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    NIce flow. this poem is sad, it shows your depression. Keep up the good work. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by LithiumSacrifice

    4/5 the repetition was great in the poem, but you kinda have it off and on with the rhyme. either intentionally or unintentionally but it didnt seem to give it the same effect. it was really good and i enjoyed it. :) so good job!

  • 17 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    This poem .. I liked. :]
    I liked how you repeated the question because it showed the signifigence of those words.

    The poem really expresses your feelings and was good. =]