Wow this was really good. I really liked the words that you used.. you showed the reader exactally how you felt without using examples from your life. Nice work, that makes the poem a lot easier to relate to. Even though this was short I still really liked the layout and how you started and ended it, I didnt feel as though it just got cut off like I normally do in short poems. Nice job.

I thought the imagery was very clear ,I thought the flow of the write was very different(in a good way) excellent!

I don't think anything needs to be changed. It has a lot of great vocabulary that blends well. Great job. :]

Hey, I really like this! I had reread it several times, and it still has the same magical effect which captivated me at first read. It's so beautiful. Love's tragedy incorporated to the changing seasons equals bloody brilliant. I'm glad to have come across such an artistic piece of work. I commend your consistency!

Take care,
Debbie

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Truly beautiful. I love reading poems that incorporate nature. I liked how you used the beginnings and endings of nature's cycles throughout as a metaphor for love (seasons changing, blooming of flowers, sunsets, a burst of colour, a dying tree). It was sad (doomed) at the same time as being peaceful (beautiful), the mourning of one thing going, and the celebration of a new thing coming to life.

Mo

I love short poems! awesome piece! keep up with the amazing work! 5/5 ^^