Hey Icarus, love this poem too. My favourite part is "there are no memories, no tears
just an undefined moment", don't know why it just kinda stuck in my mind. Keep it up!
~TalkItOut~
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As a poem expressing how you felt at the moment, I think it was pretty good. you had described things well and the last line was my favorite:
"that you are suffocating,
drowning in a dream"

good job 4/5 :)

Marjan

Great choice of words and really powerful imagery.
Short but amazingly written, truly deep.
5/5

Poetry at its finest. Way to write about something non cliche. I enjoyed this!
5/5

Wow, this poem is majestic. Atmosphere is superb. Third stanza is powerfully written but second stanza is still greatest. Wording is excellent and topic is incredibly picked.

Nice, i really like this poem. keep up the good work.