We make choices, taking paths we're destined to take
Taking risks we're destined to take
^Try not to put two of the same words that close together for a rhyme.
Okay, I love the message you have behind this poem. Very cute.
I hope you didn't get offended by my advice. I'm an honesty commenter. But I must tell you that you can't become awesome at first you have to work your way up. I learned that comments like this helped me. I hope they help you too. You should keep writing because you'll only get better at it. God Bless 5/5
Thank you for commenting my poems!
<3Tayyyy

It's good
But nothing really caught my eye.
No offense.
I just didn't find it all that exciting to read.
I paid attention to your format.
I'm lovin' it :].
Out of all.
I'll still give it a five.

I loved the idea behind this. You did good. well pinned nice flow, I had to read it twice to understand some of it, but that is probaly just me. Anyways 4/5

Good poem. The message is clear to the reader.

'So live for today
As if right this second, you will go away
Because no matter what, in this world you can not stay
No matter how long your path of life is, death will be on the way'

Loved it ^^
Keep it up 5/5

[Sarah]