Wow jenna. i really liked this peom. some of the words seemed a little distressed and pushed into the poem. but other wise it is awsome. and i almost cried when i read it.

What an excellent poem. I saw this contest and just couldn't figure out what I'd write about. The story here was very well described with a great message at the end. It takes courage to say goodbye.
Good luck on the contest.

Jenna, I loved this poem...such emotion and sadness. I enjoy reading ur poems because they always seem to have a lot of truth and sadness to them and behind them.

Ahhhh...AWESOME! Okay, beautifuly written, tells a sad but wonderful story. The rhyming wasn't forced. The flow of the poem was flawless. Ah wonderful! Love it!
God bless 5/5
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Good write my friend i especially liked the first stanza. great word usage as well. 5/5 best of wishes

The imagery was great. You had a very good point and I love how you described it so well. There was just something about the last stanza that didn't quite fit.. I don't know if it's how it is worded, but it doesn't seem to flow very well...

"And as the Preacher talks to Jesus, A tear falls down from her eye,
As she lifts her veil and finally gains the courage to say good-bye,
But when she throws her wedding band down, she smiles and turns,
Walking away from you for the last time, her lesson learned."

- Maybe you said "as" too many times... I really don't know. It could just be me.. But I think you could reword some of it to make it even better.

-BJ-

Maybe if it was something like....

And as the preacher talks to Jesus, a tear falls down from her eye,
She lifts her veil slowly and finally gains the courage to say good-bye,
Throwing down her wedding band, she smiles and turns,
Walking away from you for the last time, her lesson learned.

- Just a quick rewording... I am just giving an example of what I'd do with it.

Im not really even sure what to say about this, its awesome. Like, I cant even fathom where you get ideas like this

5/5

Ah well done. i was gripped from the very begining. the title that is. and this was excellent! i loved how you described it. how she felt. the emotion and pain she felt.

5/5 David