I don't see why you don't like this poem but we are our own worst critic. It's amazing how people become so overwhelmed in the material things and the things that really count are overlooked. This was a bittersweet poem. Saddening his life ended so, but glad it was not you. I enjoyed it.
Dixie

Makes you stop and think how quickly life can be taken away. So many take things for granted. Good job on your write.
Take Care Cindy

Wow i liked the poem.I dont see why you dont like it but o well.It was really good.