I quite enjoyed this. It was different; different is always good.
At the beginning you swtich tenses an awful lot. I think because most of the poem is in present tense it would be wise to alter it so it's all in present tense.
Therefore, on the first line you could make "stood" "stand" for instance...and on the first line of the second stanza it could be "reach" rather than "reached."
In the fourth stanza, I loved the idea of "bubble's" in your throat, it was quite graphic.
I also liked how you rounded the poem off by making the ending the same thought as the beginning. That was clever.
Thanks for sharing.

Wow... this is AMAZING! I love the imagery that you create throughout the poem. This line in particular, i really like: i see all the birds, as without me they fly.

Nice job! <3

I really liked this it seemed to have a certain rhythm to it that made it really stand out to me the flow was really nice and overall this poem was great

Hey,
I really enjoyed this poem as it was quite unique. It was an intreesting read. The first stanza got me intrested in the poem, i mean it creates this image of flying, and i think loads of us would just love to be birds and just fly away. The poem had a good stronge rhythem, the hrymes didnt seem forced and it worked with the overall poem. I liked the ending line, "the sky is much too far." i just love how this concludes this poem. Its a simple ending, your poem kinda shows us how it would be like to fly creates the image and then that stanza in particula that line just beings us back to reality. A good read, keep writing! :) xx

Really nice heart felt poem hun :D

xxx alex xx

I loved the last stanza! Such a great write. I really liked the picture you painted me!! 5/5

Not your best, but still well above adverage. I found this more readable than most poems. I like the soft approach you have in this poem.

xxx alex xxx

Very interesting poem. It is touching and emotional. You created great atmosphere and flow is excellent too. It deserves 5/5