Hmm it was ok. Not really my kind of thing because it contained far too many cliche words for me to really appreciate the meaning. Some words that I felt were cliche were "tears" (which you used often in this write) rhyming "heart" with "apart"...and "soul" "cutting" "killing" "screaming" and there may be more...
The flow/meter was ok though I don't think there were any problems with that. So format wise it was good...I just weren't personally keen on the subject and wording.
Thanks for sharing nevertheless.
This took me
About three reads to understand.
When all I had to do was
Read your title.
The flow was great.
But the poem was a bit dry.
It caught my interest
But not a whole bunch.
I know it's a poem and that
Gramatical errors do not count but...
Tears of regret linger on fraying pained skin
Put a comma after fraying :]
I really enjoyed this poem. I think it was written very well. Quite flawless. The flow was perfect, as was the description. You are amazing at that. I could definately feel the emotion in this one. It's quite sad, and tells a good story. I love the first line, it was a great beginning, as was the end. Well done. =] 5/5
I had a long comment typed out but then my stupid signal got lost and the thing was lost.
Anywho, I loved this poem. A lot.
Its not often you see a poem that has described everything so great using the perfect vocab.
It really made the poem stand out.
Its not vocab you can't understand, like some poets use.
But its not extremely simple and boring.
Your stanzas were packed with words yet you never lost flow. Well done.
I loved this ;
"Kissing him goodbye; fleeing with salty tears
Pulling her down slowly; guilt clings to her heart "
Something about it really made me go wow.
"Guilt clings to her heart" <- that was my favorite line I've read in a while.
I love this, at some parts it was a bit off, but nothing too bad. The imagery was great, but try to refrain from using one word too many times in one poem..it throws it off. Anyways, I did like this, overall.