I don't no what to think of this poem, i just didn't feel it very much, some points were like awwww and you feel sad, but then you slipped of with the emotion and lost the flow again.

you could possibly have said why they had to leave where they were going. put more realism more emotion, feelings into th epoem itself, the rhyming was basic but thats a good thing over top language does my head in.

you could tell from the poem that they were good friends thats a good thing. but you could tighten up parts of it.

possibly put it into stanzas instead of couplets, easier to read and it looks shorter then.

overall its a good poem. so keep up the work xx

Thanx it was one of my first poems...appreciate it :D