One but--the stars
i suggest putting an elipsis(...) rather than dashes... on that particular part.

Is all I bring..
to help with the flow, I suggest changing that to "It is all I bring".

other than that, a well written nature poem. I rarely read nature poems, but this one is great.

Good job, I'll have to reread it to figure out just what it means now lol!

5/5
~Stephen White

He he i found this part relee funny.

Lie down and sleep--pervert sun
Touch no one but--the stars

ahhhahaha Pervert sun.
i like the comparison.
nicley written haha!

I love how u write. keep it up..

Liked it! It was really cute! 5/5

Nazeer

WOW! i loved it.

the part
"pervert sun"
is so awesomely written.

I thoroughly enjoyed this

keep up the good work.

5/5

I found this poem to be rather eloquently written. Very well done. ^_^