Wow this is so good your so taletned i really enjoyed both p.1 and p.2 :D greatt! work

Wow i feel like in away u sound liek me thats cool good job

Great write dear...U r very talented...work on your talent...Kp writing!

Very good once again
I loved the simplicity
It was a wonderful poem
Great work once again!

I REALLY hope this isn't true.. I would seriously disrespect you. =//

Anyways.
The first one [as it always seems to be the case] was better, but this wasn't too bad. The flow was a little off, though, espically the ending line.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Talented, I am looking forward to reading more of your writing!
5/5!

I guess I can understand now. A sin can leave you with guilt and weight on your shoulders. A tough life. I liked how you continued the story from the first one, and that you kept the same overall appearance. This poem made a lot of sense and the ending made me think. I wonder if this was your plan? Great Job!

Hm the ending of this poem kind of confuses me and I dont think that it really fits properly. The only think other than that, that I think needs some work is to make sure that all of the I's are capitalized. But I liked the general message of this peice.