Comments : My pledge

  • 16 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Hey David,
    another deep one by you,
    this is so great. but dont forget we should never let someone make us feel down as this life has too much brightness, it dependon us how to find it.
    i dont know if i have told you this before, but i use to be deeply in love with a girl and she changed her feelings, i was hurt yet someone told me to ignore her as this world is full of other persons and everyday we met someone new, that was so true, now years later i realize i should have let her go before cause life is too short to be spent for a person who does not deserve it... we are here to enjoy so just smile and have fun.lol
    but great poem though

  • 16 years ago

    by Tammie

    I like the idea of this poem, it's fairly unique. The flow was a bit off at times, but mostly good. There is a lot of emotion in this, which makes it really good. The ending was really strong too. Making a stand for the pain you have been put through. Well done on this David. =] 5/5

    Tammie

  • 16 years ago

    by Cindy

    David
    Great job on this piece. Your pain comes through in the words you have penned. Take Care Cindy

  • 16 years ago

    by debbylyn

    Good job David...well written and sad. Your words convey great feelings of frustration and heartbreak....All the best, Debbie

  • 16 years ago

    by Romantic Lover

    David,
    This was heartbreaking. I hope this isn't true. Why do we ever let love go this far?
    Take care.

  • 16 years ago

    by Kalee

    This is an excellent poem David. The flow was wonderful. 5/5

    Kalee

  • 16 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    Wow very dark nice 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by June

    A great write ,sad and yet so well done ,touched my heart with every word.

  • 16 years ago

    by CrazyNlove

    Good job David. I liked it. keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by amanda flood

    Wow very good a lot of sad emotion running through it excellent work well done 5-5

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    Oh... DAvid! don't be so sad...plz it kills me when your sad. this poem was so beautiful i loved it

  • 16 years ago

    by Destiny

    Excellant Work!! ^_^ Wow... It was beautiful. Keep writing please!! 5/5

  • Wow i loved the poem but people can't hold you back and mack you want to die ... i have tryed and it isn't the way to go
    keep write your wonderrful but be safe

  • Omg I loved it! very very nicely written and perfect

  • 16 years ago

    by skynerraw

    Wow, excellent poem, powerful poem.....keep writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    Lovely!
    I don't know how a dark poem can be Lovely but this is.
    It was so deep.
    I loved it.
    5/5

    Amazing
    Elaine

  • 16 years ago

    by carissalynn

    Wheww, a lot of emotion in that. haha Great poem!

  • 16 years ago

    by Wallace

    Excellent poem, you had some very good lines in there, and the flow was impressive. Superb work, keep it up.

  • 16 years ago

    by Gypsy

    I really liked it, it was very emotive
    I especially loved the last 2 lines, they were very final and a good ending.

  • 16 years ago

    by Joe

    T_T